I took a break from revising last night after trading a couple E-mails with my friend Ray Veen and watched an episode of Californication.
This scene came up and I felt like I needed to go find a Xanax or something. It Freaked. Me. Out.
**Disclaimer: This video uses some bad language and isn't really work, family, children friendly. But, my blog post does hinge on it...you decide.**
What crawled up my spine, you say? Oh, just the awfulness of the kids writing. Of course, I don't write about Vampires. And I'm not guilty of using phrases like, Rogue-ish Good Looks (or whatever). The part that got me?
He was wicked-smart.
I went back to my book and, yep, there was this line staring at me like some kind of purple, hyphenated freak:
"All with that crazy-beautiful smile."
One adjective's enough, I'd say.
Back to Mr. Veen.
In his E-mail he said, "I've spent so much time reading my own writing lately, I'm losing my grip on how to phrase things."
True-dat, my friends. For me, it's a matter of keeping up the pace of my voice (for this book, it's a very fast-paced, wicked-smart....gasp!.....;)....kinda voice.) I fall into the habit of over-extending, trying to be too clever - overwriting, to be all blunt about it.
So how do you deal with this? Am I alone?